Revision Strategy

After reading Alan's peer review, I realized that the introduction to my topic was a little off as it didn't quite give the exact point i was trying to make. I feel like I need to rework my opening statements to better suit the webtext, as well as making the transition from one subtopic to the next a little less confusing. I might also need to add in some details about people using Star Wars as a way of teaching the monomyth. I will also need to begin writing the history portion of webtext.

The main thing I need to work on is the style of my webtext. I definitely need to add color, pictures, and font changes. It is pretty boring visually right now.

After the Conference:
I do have a few places where i need to add more citation, as well as fix previous citations. Again the visual aspect needs to be worked on. I need to make sure I keep the same tone, probably need to rewrite a few sections.

Audience

My topic might be of interest for people who enjoy the Star Wars films, as well as people wanting to find new ways of learning. Without even taking the learning aspect into consideration, the portion of my future audience that thoroughly enjoys the Star Wars franchise is of a great number. There are a lot of people that make up my audience that understand the English language, but there are also a large number that only know the basics. Some of my audience already knows about the teaching aspects of the films, but a large portion never thought about Star Wars as a way of learning about religion, history, mythology, etc. My audience probably expects me to inform them on how the Star Wars films have "conned" all of us into learning. After reading my webtext, I would like my audience to understand how watching films from popular culture can be a great lkearning tool for other subjects.

My purpose is to inform people of how the Star Wars films were designed to teach, as well as informing them of how to use these films as a fun way to learn. It is also to persuade them to find other aspects of our culture that could help them to learn (other films, music, etc.)
I think that my webtext should be fairly simple to unserstand to reach my audience, as well as somewhat vague in the terminology of the films for those people that are not that familiar with them.